First of all, I'm angry that this chapter is so similar to me next one >.> I wanted to take my anger out on the review, but the beta-reading was too good. Nice job, both of you.
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“<Argh, my eye!>” Nidoking yelled, holding his bleeding right eye and stumbling backwards, blinded. A slow trickle of scarlet blood leaked from the covered eye.
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I recently learned that eyes don't actually "bleed", they just excrete liquid. This isn't a
real mistake because a "bloody eye" is a common term.
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Right as Corphish finished the joke he found himself being blindsided by Deyja. Corphish was knocked sideways and stopped at the base of a tree. He groaned and got to his many feet using his claw. Corphish raised his pincers in front of him.
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Haha... I love Corphish. Can't wait to see his personality after evolution.
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Jeff took out a knife and cut the rope binding Treecko and Corphish together. He then looked at the two and asked, “Are you guys cool?”
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"a" became "A"... I think that's right.
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“<Oh yeah?>”
“<Yeah, ‘Tree Hugger’!>”
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