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Old June 24th, 2008 (1:09 PM).
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Wow.

A really sharp turn from all the normal OT fics, which is a good thing. Only thing I'm concerned with is the motive of Claire, like Jax said. And this being from chapter two, maybe the motive was said previously, since I don't know what's in chapter one.

But even still, I do think this is a story I'll be actually reading. And I like the way that you described Pidgey's suffocation--nicely done, as well are the other descriptions. I look foward to seeing this on the main forum.

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