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Old June 25th, 2008 (11:12 AM).
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Originally Posted by POKEMON_MASTER_0 View Post
I'm beginning to get the impression that the narrator doesn't like being held captive. I wonder who he/she will have to work for. I'm also wondering who recovered these audio recordings and how they were recovered. I'm fairly sure that I'll find out in due time.

I liked how the narrator wasn't able to stand at first. It shows that despite the fact that he/she can use psi waves to manipulate reality, they (the narrator) aren't without inherited weaknesses. It would be a whole lot easier just to have them be able to stand freely with little effort. You however, take the extra time and effort to turn the instant into an opportunity to develop character, rather than skip through it for the sake of ease.

That's one of the strong points of your writing. You know how to turn the subtleties into opportunities to develop the story.

I'll keep an eye out for the next chapter.
I've never really noticed that before...where I turn subtle things into character development. It makes sense, but I was really just trying to make the scene realistic. I figured a new born of any species couldn't walk instantly, let alone one that walked on two legs.

And yeah, everything will be revealed in due time. It wouldn't be a story otherwise

Next chapter is already in the works, probably popping up sometime around the end of the week. Need to get cracking on the next Eon Chronicles chapter still, but that will inherently take longer (these chapters are extremely short in comparison to E.C., although you probably noticed that).
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