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Old August 21st, 2008 (12:44 PM).
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This loosely garbed man was a local.

Piecing everything a lot together Dane silently came to the conclusion Entie has awoken.

“Crobat!” Dane piped grinning. “Immediately find the other elders and report that the Volcano Pokemon has risen!”

^ Sentences that need revised/ grammar errors.

No spelling errors.

I like the concept and what you have so far. You were very descriptive except for the inside of the volcano.

I know you said this was a draft, but I would like to see more.

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