This loosely garbed man was a local.
Piecing everything a lot together Dane silently came to the conclusion Entie has awoken.
“Crobat!” Dane piped grinning. “Immediately find the other elders and report that the Volcano Pokemon has risen!”
^ Sentences that need revised/ grammar errors.
No spelling errors.
I like the concept and what you have so far. You were very descriptive except for the inside of the volcano.
I know you said this was a draft, but I would like to see more.
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