well you should maybe had spent some time in the plot and story idea space but whatever. Here is what I think from another game developers point of view. first of all it would seem you have already shosen the name you like best "Eclipse" but it is ok to see what others like. The OW's of eevee and its evolutions arent good at all its a problem I had once and has been dealt with but yes those look horrible especially with the D/P graphis(not to fond of them). But anyway yeah. I also think that the player in the room is the best screen. The others look as if they are not part of the story yet and you just set them up just for the screen. Have you completed any eventing yet?