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Old November 7th, 2008 (07:41 PM).
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Chapter is IMO tad less funny then the previous
I actually laughed a lot more reading this chap than I did the Miror B battle chapter. You did a pretty amazing job.

Here's a grammar mistake I found:
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As for the Shadow Pokemon obtained, the number had grown to seventeen. In addition to the Yanma and Sudowoodo Wes had snagged, they had collected some more in the raid: in a a Remoraid, Mantine, Qwilfish, Dunsparce, Meditate and a Swablu.
Just a small nitpick, but I don't want to get slammed by Astinus *shot*

Some funny lines that I found:

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“Oh, fine... what’s your name?”

“Oh, it’s ‘Phillar Caractor’,”
This one really got me laughing at what it is supposed to be.

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I spent ages EV training my Magikarp
Wait a second, Johnson is actually smart enough to understand the concept of EV training?

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a television that could display shows in brilliant detail would also be able to sharpen pencils, and have a bagel-making unit at the side of all things
BAGELS!!!! THIS TV IS WIN! GIVE ME SOME BAGELS!

Great job with this fic. I really have enjoyed reading it. I hope you come up with antoher chapter soon!

P.S. Happy belated b-day!
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