The Retelling of Pokémon Colosseum
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November 7th, 2008 (7:41 PM).
I'm back. I think.
In the swimming pool
Chapter is IMO tad less funny then the previous
I actually laughed a lot more reading this chap than I did the Miror B battle chapter. You did a pretty amazing job.
Here's a grammar mistake I found:
As for the Shadow Pokemon obtained, the number had grown to seventeen. In addition to the Yanma and Sudowoodo Wes had snagged, they had collected some more in the raid
Remoraid, Mantine, Qwilfish, Dunsparce, Meditate and a Swablu.
Just a small nitpick, but I don't want to get slammed by Astinus *shot*
Some funny lines that I found:
“Oh, fine... what’s your name?”
“Oh, it’s ‘Phillar Caractor’,”
This one really got me laughing at what it is supposed to be.
I spent ages EV training my Magikarp
Wait a second, Johnson is actually smart enough to understand the concept of EV training?
a television that could display shows in brilliant detail would also be able to sharpen pencils, and have a bagel-making unit at the side of all things
BAGELS!!!! THIS TV IS WIN! GIVE ME SOME BAGELS!
Great job with this fic. I really have enjoyed reading it. I hope you come up with antoher chapter soon!
P.S. Happy belated b-day!
I'm back. But not as active as before. 2 years has been too long.
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