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Old December 16th, 2008 (12:26 AM). Edited December 16th, 2008 by Swift!.
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Title of Story: Don't have one yet. =P
Fandom: Pokemon
Plot summary: A secret organization, hidden by a popular business (Silph Co.), are allowing people to become half-human, half-Pokemon hybrids with a simple injection. A certain citizen doesn't like this and says it's unhuman, so he decides to hunt down every human/Pokemon hybrid and kill them. But, with the "treatment" becoming more and more popular, how will he possibly be able to kill them all?
Genre: Action, Thriller, Suspense.
Rating (PG, R, etc): PG15 or higher (for violence, language and gore)
Type of mentor needed: Plot and Language
Writing sample of story:
Spoiler:

prologue
Click.

Beep.

“This is the status update recording for week 58.”

Beep.

“My assistant and I have been running this experiment-”

Beep.

“-uhm, we’ve been running it for just over 13 months now a-”

Beep.

“-and... the results of Trial... 362, have come back clean. The-”

Beep.

“...the test subject is showing no sign of infection or scientific-”

Beep.

“...fault. I believe we have finally created a stable and none le-”

Beep.

Click.

A man in a lab coat spun on an office chair and stared over to an open door; his coat was frayed and tattered at the bottom as well as at the end of the sleeves, smears of new and old blood covered his clothing. His thick, rimless glasses had a thin layer of dust settled upon them and the chair he sat upon had a wheel missing, making it hard to work his way around the room without standing up. His colourless tongue darted out of his mouth, running over his dry and cracked lips in an attempt to restore as much moisture to them as he could.

He groaned as he rose to his feet, as if he hadn’t walked in days, his pale fingers twitched as he cautiously made his way over to the door. By the state his clothing was in, you could tell why he was acting this way; the damage he had sustained was something he didn’t want to have to experience again. “Edgar...” he managed to say, hoping to hear a response, but one didn’t come. With extra caution, the scientist stepped into the connecting room and prepared himself for whatever it was he would find.

A powerful stench of rotting flesh and month old blood washed over to him, he nearly stumbled over at how putrid the smell was, his head turned to the left and he saw the large doors of a room filled with dead Pokémon inside it, the doors were opened completely and a pile of rotting bodies had rolled out onto the floor. He put his hand over his mouth and cautiously made his way over to the makeshift Pokémon tomb.

As he made his way closer, short sharp breaths could be heard from his left; he turned quickly and let the hand covering his mouth drop away. There, sitting with his back against the dirty metal walls, was another man, obviously the scientists assistant. This man was dressed just like the other, but one major thing could be used to tell them apart, the fact that the assistant was bleeding profusely and there was a huge gash running from his right shoulder down to the left side of his hip. The scientist hobbled over quickly and kneeled down beside the injured man, “Edgar,” he breathed, while hovering his hands over the large gash, “What happened?”

The assistant, Edgar, turned his head with the little strength he had left and pointed into the room filled with the rotting Pokémon bodies. The scientist turned his head as well and stared over to the room, that’s when he noticed the smashed glass spread across the floor. At that moment, he knew that he was wrong about Trial 362; he quickly turned back to Edgar. His face dropped though, his assistant was dead from the loss of blood, he rose to his feet and headed for the “tomb”. The scientist peered inside and saw a humanlike shape in the corner; it was kneeling down and eating one of the dead bodies.

All of a sudden, the creature turned around and spotted the scientist, with incredible speed, the beast charged towards him and smashed him out of the way. The scientist was thrown against the wall; he looked up at the creature and watched as it tore through the wall, heading out into the world.
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