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Old March 2nd, 2009 (05:34 PM).
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Nice Intermission there. Heh, glad I read it as now I'm refreshed as to what happened in the story, or at least the gist of it. XD

Hm, Viola not her real name? Either Benvolio is lying, or maybe this is Viola's papa's doing (him being in the Prospero House and all). Guess we'll have to wait and see.

I like how Haunter got to Viola's senses and made her realize why she decided to be in the game in the first place. I think though Viola rushed in her decision a bit. Maybe you could have had her thought about this a bit more or something.

Looking forward to the next chapter!
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