Thread: [Pokémon] Mentor (PG-14)
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Old March 21st, 2009 (09:03 AM).
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Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: Wisconsin, USA
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Nature: Timid
Don't worry about getting this up quickly, Dagzar. My own chapters usually take up to three or four weeks to get to the point where they're decent enough to post, which is why neither Dark Nostalgia or Biohazard have been updated yet.

As for this chapter, for some reason it struck me as just bit more relaxed than the last one. Maybe with the whole thing about sleep in the beginning I was lulled a little. Still compelling though. Leah and their others' personalities are really coming out nicely, I think. If anything was off, maybe this could have been just a bit more active in the first part. Just my thoughts though...
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