Thread: [Pokémon] Mentor (PG-14)
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Old April 4th, 2009 (8:51 AM).
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This was another good chapter. I really liked the creepiness factor you added to it, and the only error I could find was the one quoted. When a name ends with an S (Alexis, Sands, Helios, and so on) you use the last letter as if it were the second part of the 's and put an apostrophe at the end of the word. ;D

Thanks, Giratinasaur! Heh, that was another grammar issue I was thinking about since I stupidly nicknamed the Sandshrew ‘Sands’. Stupid possession grammar always gets me. I’m glad you thought it was creepy since I’ve never written that type of stuff before. And man, was it fun to write!

That Is the only mistake that jumped out at me.

Correct me if I'm wrong, but "laying" would be correct, because "lying" is the act of telling a lie.

And I did not see anything wrong with the chapter.
Thanks for reviewing, Buoysel! Okay, since I’ve been using ‘laying’ throughout the story, I haven’t been making a mistake. Excellent!
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