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May 9th, 2009 (09:42 PM).
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Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Possibly in a tree
I'm way too tired to find grammar errors and such, though the following was pretty obvious:
“What’s the rush,” Leah spoke up. “Probably won’t be for a few more hours.”
Should be a ? after rush.
Anywho, I just got caught up. Nice chapters. The battle with the gym leader seemed very practical. Actually, your take on Pokemon is a very practical one in general. All of this seems like it could actually happen if there were really Pokemon in the world so good job.
Haha, Leah got thrown off a boat. =)
Ooh, and I liked Leah's background story. Can't wait to find out more about her!
to see a map of Acceber!
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