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Old June 19th, 2009, 05:57 AM
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Manaphyman
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Join Date: Nov 2008
Location: Connecticut, USA
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Thanks for the review! Yeah since rewriting the prologue, I have switched word programs, so the spelling/grammar mistakes should be limited. Remember what you read was just a prologue, meaning something that happened before the story takes place, setting the tone for the rest of the piece. I didn't develop my characters in the prologue because well...it wouldnt have made sense to. They are developed in the latter chapters.

Swearing? I don't believe there is too much in the prolgoue. At any rate, I'm not sure if you're a teenager or not, but that is the way a plethora of them talk, at least in my area. Swearing declines after the characters mature.
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