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Old July 7th, 2009, 09:22 AM
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You'd better not!!! Do you know how long we have been waiting for a new chapter?! Well, I guess you do because you're the one writing... Anyway, I love this story; you cannot forget about it!
Well...I have certainly not forgotten about the fic, as I'm still writing it (or, well, will write it once I get free from exams). It's again my beta-reader, but I don't blame him. ^^
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Avoid starting sentences with "and." It is unnecessary- just start with "Just..."
Even though my German teacher told me, long ago (lol) similar things, I still think "Just" at the beginning of a sentence sounds even more awkward. o,o
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The "she" in "she smiled" should begin with a capital "S."
*gives note to beta-reader* Finding mistakes of this kind is his job. 0=)
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You are overusing "yet" again- way too many examples to bother putting here.
And I thought I cut it down...>.<
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0_0 Is that a word?
According to my dictionary, it is.
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Nya... I think I'm going to stop with grammar issues. It gets too annoying to keep posting down here when I want to read!!!
XD *agrees*
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Cynthia!
*nods* 0=)
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That is just asking to be proved wrong.
It is? 0=) (CPF would *so* like it to be proved wrong, nah, CPF? XD)
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Great chapter- well, except for some awkward grammar. I love the mystery you've created! Ahh! I can't wait for the next chapter!!!
XD Thanks (okay, I don't see my grammar as awkward, but then, it's a different language for me...XD). Most of the mystery will be carried over into the next part (=/= next chapter), so stay tuned! XDBut don't worry, I won't leave many secrets open. ;-)
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By the way, is Will's last name Bender?
0=) It is, it is...*winks at Wyyrlokk*
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