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Old November 22nd, 2009 (01:36 AM).
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This was really good. I've got nothing really to say in terms of constructive criticism, but within those two parts I was able to capture the characters perfectly in my mind, something which usually doesn't happen for chapters upon chapters of other fan fictions. Your description was perfect, even if they were a bit gory. Really good, put a whole new spin on Pokémon. Especially the moral at the end. Well done.
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