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Old December 13th, 2009 (08:10 AM).
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It really could use more story and less background on the legendaries. Even you went "blah, blah, blah" in your own brief blurb about the story. It looks like you *really* want a story about legendaries, but you need to put some emphasis on the player, too. And who is the player? What is Team Chaos up to? You gotta answer questions like these or else we're going to assume you're just using a generic Team Rocket-type adversary and that you couldn't think of something different.
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