I am sorry to say this, but I did not like this hack. I'm not saying this to belittle you or make you feel bad, but I am saying this to help you for later on. This is constructive critisicm and if I offend you I'm sorry.
Here are my following complaints:
1. What does a Cyborg have to do anything with Pokemon?
2. What do ghost twins have anything to do with Pokemon?
3. The characters weren't believable. They didn't seem to have any real emotion.
4. The Plot seems to be more based off of a Sci-Fi movie than with Pokemon. You need to watch out for that. Pokemon games have to be primarily based around Pokemon.
5. I like what you did with putting yourself as an NPC. People always like that.
Thank you for taking the time to look at my complaints.
With all regards,