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That was a cool chapter. But, how could Cubburn get knocked out after one hit? Anyways, I think the bad guys progressing without the good guys knowing it. For a suggestion, I'd say split the story: have some of it the evil view, some of it Zack's view. When the views collide, it adds emphasis. Just sayin'
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