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Old May 31st, 2010 (5:59 AM).
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Well, there’s not much to go by here except for the narrator repeating how much the world sucks after some post-apo catastrophe, so this review won’t be very long. It certainly got the message across, but I have to say that it was a little… detached. Some of these sentences could stand a few variations in punctuation marks so that they don’t sound so much like a list. Yes, I know it was supposed to be stream-of-consciousness stuff, but it’s just very difficult to follow. I’ll continue later, but for right now I’m being dragged off to do something else.

Bottom line: The period isn’t the only punctuation mark, but other than that it gets the message.

Also, I would think that it would go here, if they’re just a series of drabbles.