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May 31st, 2010, 05:59 AM
what's your sign?
Join Date: Apr 2008
Well, there’s not much to go by here except for the narrator repeating how much the world sucks after some post-apo catastrophe, so this review won’t be very long. It certainly got the message across, but I have to say that it was a little… detached. Some of these sentences could stand a few variations in punctuation marks so that they don’t sound so much like a list. Yes, I know it was supposed to be stream-of-consciousness stuff, but it’s just very difficult to follow. I’ll continue later, but for right now I’m being dragged off to do something else.
The period isn’t the only punctuation mark, but other than that it gets the message.
Also, I would think that it would go here, if they’re just a series of drabbles.
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