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Old June 27th, 2010, 02:07 PM
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Well, the title makes little sense (I mean, I guess "sky" makes sense since the evil team wants to put the region in the sky, and techno sounds cool, but is the sky itself technological or is it set in a cyberpunk world or is the entire soundtrack techno or what). Buuuut I suppose I can forgive that since you have high production values here.

I'm... not entirely thrilled with the plot. For all its embellishments, it features the protagonist moving to a new region and an evil team with a nebulous and nonsensical goal led by the protagonist's parents. And that's not creative in the least, really. Also the plot hole of the maps has already been pointed out to you, I assume.

...Lemme guess, there's more that you're not showing us that explains away the faults I'm seeing here. That's fine. But what you are showing us, for all of its shininess, has some problems.