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Old July 1st, 2010 (11:55 AM).
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There are a few grammatical mistakes in the 2nd video (the one about the nightmare), so please do check everything thoroughly. Also, I think a change of music for the nightmare would be handy (try the Deoxys theme, not the Battle theme, the theme where Deoxys emerges, but doesn't fight). Also, no offense, but your tiles aren't the greatest I've seen (as the houses seem... Weird, I think they miss outlines on the roofs), but keep up the good work! I expect good things from this sort of beginning!

Man of Steel
He harbors no shame
Got cut a raw deal
But he holds no blame
Gone and forgot to feel
Numb for pretentious pain
As he spins the wheel
There's no loss nor no gain...

Nerves of Steel
He must remain
Even if it kills
To remember my name
A view to a thrill
Like Campari and Champagne
I'm on the rocks
Please tell me, What Is My Name?

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