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Old October 1st, 2010 (04:02 PM).
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Kholdy
I LP, and not much else.
 
Join Date: May 2010
Location: The tiny country inbetween France and The Netherlands.
Age: 25
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This LP could be improved on. A lot of your jokes fall flat because they're very predictable, or have been done a lot already. You have very few images as well - didn't even capture a single part of the conversation with Oak and Gary in the lab.
Also, but these may just be personal preferences, I wouldn't have picked a starter before asking the readers which one they want. I also wouldn't announce what I'm going to catch in the next update, that just ruins the surprise.

That aside, I do appreciate the fact that you're using proper English and no immature jokes. I'm sure this LP could be better if you put some work into it.
Good luck!
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