Wait for it
Bah, never got the chance to read the creepypasta entries, so I’m reading and reviewing the ones posted here.
*goes off finishing the rest of this one shot*
Imagine an unknown presence suddenly slip into your conscious, seize control of your movements and shift through your entire life methodically.
Jason didn’t enjoy that.
I have to say, you did quite well putting the feminist narration in this piece. XD I really like the lightheartedness of it. There were a couple parts though I felt it rambled a bit and force out. For instance:
I also think the ending you stressed a little too much how the female trainer is sweet and the man that killed her is a jerk, hence why all males are jerks. Then again, feminist writing then to keep repeating itself. :x
Overall, I enjoyed this piece and some parts were quite funny. Great work!