February 9th, 2011, 07:55 PM
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The epitome of crazy
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Join Date: Jan 2011
Location: Ethiopia
Age: 17
Gender:
Female 
Nature: Quiet
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Originally Posted by theowlmanlives
Yeah, I'm pretty new to poetry. There was more to the poem but it faded before i could write it down.
I'm gonna try a Pikachu poem I made when I was young but have been trying to improve. (once again I know this is not good)
Pikachu
Oh Pikachu, Mouse of lightning,
You are so determined when you're fighting,
When times are hard you don't surrender:
Oh Pikachu, your lightning's defender
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I like this poem, it's short and sweet 
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Oh Pikachu, your lightning's defender
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But in this line shouldn't it be 'you're lightning's defender' instead of your?
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