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I enjoyed this mostly. I don't personally like how the story is begun (structure wise) that much because I personally dislike prologues. I try to avoid starting any of my stories with a prologue. One thing that caught my eye though was the fact that you said that Ren defeated thirteen gym leaders. I am pretty sure there were eight gym leaders in Hoenn and in all the regions of Pokemon. (Besides Orange Island, but I don't believe that is canon.)
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Last edited by First Snow; April 19th, 2011 at 11:21 PM.
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