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Old April 23rd, 2011 (11:05 PM).
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Pretty much Astinus already said what I wanted to say for this chapter. XD You did really well showing the crowd's reaction to when it was announced Ren is on the train and him not liking it. And yeah, Natasha has a fun personality so far. Looking forward to her role in the story.

I think what I like most about this chapter is the part where Ren says he promises he'll stay with his mom for at least a mom and the two of them will spend time together. Very sweet of him and I too feel sorry his mom has been alone for quite a while.

Nice chapter here! Things shall be interesting after why Steven wants to talk to Ren is revealed.
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