Thread: [Pokémon] Memory Retrieval
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Old May 4th, 2011 (07:53 AM).
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A very good story, to say the least. Im not much of a critic and I generally stick to RPs but I suppose I could give my oppinion.

Lucifer is an iteresting character (Like others have said), he seems to be rather impulsive, and Im not sure if you meant him to look that eg. Lucifer suddenly decided that hes going to attempt to escape the hospital and when he does he joins a pokemon tournament? thats a bit rushed, dont you think? But thats just my opppinion. And other than that just everything else thats already been said.

Its a great story
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