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Old May 14th, 2011 (6:01 PM).
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The first thing I can point which is incorrect is that he has current demon and human friends. No species can contact eachother, and they only make contact once in the God's Realm for the games. Only angels live in that district, and each district has miles of space between.

Second, it could be me, but your first sentence sounds similar to mr.kibbles...*Shrug* And how he has a scar on his left eye, and hair is used to cover it...Actually, there are alot of characteristics about him that sound the same to Kibble's character.

For now, I will say that it is rejected. Please revise your appearance. However, I will put it under consideration. Everything else seems good to me. Just fix the appearance and the part about him meeting with other species.
"Your plans will fail, my sweet lady. And when they do, your stories will be nothing but lies, your rebellion will be in vain, and war will rage for years until you are but a speck of dust." - Noh
"The lies of your world will be exposed. My rebellion will rein over your realm, and no longer will this time be plagued by war." - ???
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