great story which diverted from the traditional o-my-a-pokemon-is-attacking-might-as-well-get-a-pokeball-from-the-briefcase or the don't-go-to-tall-grass-becaus-of-pokemon-i-know-i'll-give-you-one. Just spotted a few minor errors.
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And when you found one, it wasn't always going to eagerly accept being under a trainers care.
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And when you found one, it wasn't always going to eagerly accept being under a
trainer's care.
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Ryukaa then through his Starter Ball at Impo.
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Ryukaa then
threw his Starter Ball at Impo.
(and I'm suggesting you to change "to" to "towards.")
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Slowpoke! It was dipping its' tail in the water and I caught it.
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Slowpoke! It was dipping
its tail in the water and I caught it.
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It's kinda lazy, but I plan to work on that." Rossay said, as the Slowpoke swished its tail back and worth with its eyes half closed.
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but I plan to work on that," Rossay said,
(I think, that should be a comma, considering it was followed up by "Rossay said.")
Minor errors like I said. Comma usage, apostrophe etc. I like the feel of the story though. It feels familiar 'cause I'm also a Potter fan.
here's a good luck to the rest of the story.