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June 8th, 2011, 07:59 AM
Mega Ampharos is the one.
Join Date: May 2010
great story which diverted from the traditional o-my-a-pokemon-is-attacking-might-as-well-get-a-pokeball-from-the-briefcase or the don't-go-to-tall-grass-becaus-of-pokemon-i-know-i'll-give-you-one. Just spotted a few minor errors.
And when you found one, it wasn't always going to eagerly accept being under a trainers care.
And when you found one, it wasn't always going to eagerly accept being under a
Ryukaa then through his Starter Ball at Impo.
his Starter Ball at Impo.
(and I'm suggesting you to change "to" to "towards.")
Slowpoke! It was dipping its' tail in the water and I caught it.
Slowpoke! It was dipping
tail in the water and I caught it.
It's kinda lazy, but I plan to work on that." Rossay said, as the Slowpoke swished its tail back and worth with its eyes half closed.
but I plan to work on that,
" Rossay said,
(I think, that should be a comma, considering it was followed up by "Rossay said.")
Minor errors like I said. Comma usage, apostrophe etc. I like the feel of the story though. It feels familiar 'cause I'm also a Potter fan.
here's a good luck to the rest of the story.
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