@Kiyoshi - The personality is a bit different from how it usually is. I don't have much of a problem with it, but some people in future RP's you sign up for might, so watch out for that. The history is only one paragraph, but it's a good-sized paragraph, and I can see a spot where you can split it, so you're also fine. There were some minor grammatical errors, but they weren't too distracting. :P As for the RP Sample:
Should become this:
Other then that, you're doing fine! Battles in the future should of course be longer, but I asked for only a couple of paragraphs so it's okay. I like your style and humor, and I'm looking forward to seeing your character! HOpefully you'll have a good time!
@Xlugon Pyro - You are reserved. I hope you want what's in it, too. ;)