I laughed so much at some of these parts! Awesome chapter! Oh, but I noticed one typo:
Quote originally posted by Cutlerine:
“I'm terribly sorry,” he apologised again. “Truly, I am. But the only rich submariner I know has just left for the bottom of the sea with his criminal team. I’m afraid I don't think there are evenany other submarines available.”
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You forgot the space there. But other than that, everything's fine.