[SWC] The Beastman
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July 28th, 2011, 02:33 PM
Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: That thar Kingdom. The United one.
It's amazing the level of detail you managed to put into this, in such a short time. A well-deserving member of the SWC's top three, for sure.
I feel Sirinian was a well developed character and the way his mindset changes from beginning to end is very smooth, as opposed to him suddenly changing. I love the way you characterised Celebi (had me giggling, especially the part where she complained about Dialga). I also liked how you dealt with the culture clash, making it seem somewhat more realistic than Lorelei and Sirinian totally understanding each other at once.
I didn't notice anything wrong with it and really enjoyed it - the premise of the story is interesting and you executed it very well. No complaints here!
Whatever a spider can.
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