First, your title screen graphics have been lifted directly from the opening cinematic and title screen of FireRed. There's nothing against that, sure, but it's kinda obvious is all.
Second, the uhh... Rainbow Lugia? Riiiight. And seven elements? It bothers me enough when people make Light and Dark elements, but Space? Really? If you look at different cultures, the elements are usually air, water, earth, and fire. Sometimes wood, sometimes metal, very rarely light.
On a final note, the dialogue you've shown isn't exactly the best - it definitely needs to be looked over - and I'm confused as to what's going on in that first blue screen.