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Old September 10th, 2011 (10:59 PM).
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Join Date: Aug 2008
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Alright...

I appreciate you taking the time to make an SU, poke_fan21, but in it's current state I'm sorry to say I can't accept it. I am however willing to help you work on it to improve it so that I can accept it though, if you're willing to improve on it.

Basically? The main current problems are that the grammar is in need of a bit of improvement to meet some standards and that in general it's a bit short. I'm also rather concerned that he's the son of a canon character, personally. (Lt. Surge)
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