To Cutlerine: On the contrary, good sir. I'm glad you've brought these problems to my attention. Because as we all know; KNOWING IS GROWING! I encourage constructive criticism of all kinds; so I certainly don't mind if you rip my story apart. But I'm certainly glad that you've enjoyed what you read so far, and I hope that you continue to take pleasure in this story.
Anyway, commas are a weak point of mine, but I think that's just because I'm not too clear on how to use them. Good news is that I did a little research and I think I figured out where to put the buggers now, but please inform me if this problem persists in my writing.
Now for an update!!!