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Old December 10th, 2011 (06:18 PM).
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I quite liked the War poem there - read nicely and had a nice atmosphere captured in it. I didn't see any mistakes either.

Favourite bit would be the line about darkness haunting those with no soul, although admittedly I would argue that it would also haunt those with a soul so maybe some rewording of the latter part would be something to consider? Not the first part though as I liked the expression of it haunt(ing). The second last line sounded a bit confusing to me as well and didn't quite link in with the last line in sound or subject imo, but otherwise I certainly enjoyed that poem. =)
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