Thread: [Pokémon] A Wynaut's Novel
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Old December 11th, 2011 (03:06 AM).
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Sorry but, I can’t take this seriously, the description is zero, and so is the character development, you shouldn’t rely on images so much to illustrate what’s going on, specially because some of them, are well of poor quality, but this is something to criticize in the Art Forums.

The plot is weird and wacky, and I’m pretty sure it’s too short to be a fanfic, let alone a novel.

Characters jump out of nowhere, and it’s just tacky. Sorry, the story’s outline is … okay, but you need to work on it, give a reason for Flygon and Voltorb Squad to appear, why is Groundoun angry?

And remember, this is a fanfic / novel meaning you don’t rely on images, if you do it’s a comic.

A plot this short, could be converted to become a poem though.
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