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Old December 11th, 2011 (03:33 AM).
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I really liked the poem, very deep and all, but some lines caught my attention, for example you start the poem with “And”, when it implies addition and must come with a previous sentence, some like this style though, so I’m not going very deep here. I liked the rhyming scheme too. And that’s it, there isn’t much to work on as the poem is great as it is.
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