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Old December 13th, 2011 (07:48 AM).
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Nice poem and all, but I noticed it don’t flow, also there are words that, while literary, could have been worded better, for example “I call for help” is better than “I cry for help” at least in my opinion and it would kind of make the poem more flowing; as if you’re going to have some lengthy words you need to get it bigger overall. I noticed you capitalized “guard” without an apparent need, was it for emphasis? If yes, why? While this do express your feeling to Gardevoir, it could be better, at least in my opinion.
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