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January 28th, 2012 (5:57 PM).
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Join Date: Sep 2010
Location: I have no idea anymore
you need to look over your SU you called your character a different name a couple of times.
Also when I think of someone who is excitable I do not think of someone who over thinks their strategies... People who tend to over think things (IE me) we tend to take a lot of time thinking up plans and not taking action (so do a lot of standing around and thinking about something instead of doing it). Excitable to me implies one just jumps in without thinking too much. So if you could expand on what you mean by that it would be helpful.
Also you need to explain why he feels all alone in the world... There has to be a reason behind it other than he just feels that way. Especially since he is a social butterfly.
Sorry for the slow response I forgot to check the OOC the last few days >.<
Writing a story:
Legend of Eur
would love some feedback.
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