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Old February 13th, 2012 (03:28 AM).
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Quote originally posted by Aura Rift:
I could have edited the power again without too much trouble but if my entire writing style doesn't seem to fit in, wether it's because you think it's not up to par or for some other reason then I suppose there is absolutely no point in my continuing attempts to join this RP, so either way good luck with it and I guess thanks for the oppurtunity
I based the judging of my decision on your RP sample, which is, for me, the best indication of your writing and what finalises your acceptance. In regards to this RP, your paragraphs are too small and fragmented into sentences, and you have a lot of dialogue.
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