: Ruby hack:
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February 28th, 2012 (05:46 AM).
Join Date: Jan 2009
I like the story so far, however what you have written is basically a summary of the first 10 minutes of gameplay. It would be nice to include some background or hint at what could be happening in this new dimension. Information about MEGA-Corp would be great as they seem to have importance? ;D
I like the choice of Starter, Surskit is one of my favourites :3. I also appreciate how there is an emotional connection to the starter rather than just being given it.
Your mapping seems to be your Achilles Heel, some portions are very square like:
It could do with a bit more variety: less straight tree boundaries in particular.
Your use of rocks and hedges is also excessive, generally I wouldn't include rocks far away from a mountain/ledge area as they look out of place. Hedges should probably be used more sparingly and if you want a big hedge use the connectable ones.
Keep up the good work and I look forward to finding out how the story develops.
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