[bobandbill]

And I was lucky that I was grabbing that link because I totally just saw you post two chapters in a different thread. Put your chapters in the same thread so readers don't have to go hunt for the next one.

This is correct, but I'll merge your two threads together for you. Note it may be better to keep it to one chapter per post though.

Tak note of what was said there - there's some solid advice. Consider editing before writing more as well and check up on things while you write, as there's simple mistakes such as calling Falkner 'Faulkner’.