Thread: [Pokémon] Tales Of A Porygon
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Old April 12th, 2012 (03:25 AM).
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"Where did I came from?" should be "Where did I come from?"

"proggramed" should be "programmed"



"When I was created, all those people were happy, they finally created an artificial Pokemon."


Instead, try "When I was created, all of those people were happy; they finally created an artificial Pokemon."

Adding the word "of" to sentences easily make them sound better.

"But then, that Pokemon was found, they left me aside, and started splicing that Pokemon's genes over and over again, the result was awfull."

"But then, that Pokemon was found; they left me aside and started splicing that Pokemon's genes over and over again. The result was awful."

or

"But then, that Pokemon was found. They left me aside, and they started splicing that Pokemon's genes over and over again. The result was awful."

In certain times, one must use a comma and a conjunction (for, and, nor, but, or, so, yet) to divide two independent clauses from each other.

An example:

My name is Jessi. I like dogs.

My name is Jessi, and I like dogs.

I'll post more later, as I have to go to school.
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