Invisible (one-shot, PG-13)
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April 21st, 2012 (9:03 PM).
you can breathe now. x
Join Date: Jun 2007
Location: Illinois, USA.
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This certainly was creepy. It fits any of the Ghost Pokemon, particularly the ones that tend to be found in cities. I was personally thinking of Haunter. The use of "baby" as the name the ghost gave the trainer added to the creepiness. "Baby" is such an intimate pet name in relationships, and having the ghost see the trainer that way made the ending more effective.
This was the scariest part. It's like the ghost didn't realize the trainer had died until then.
You were going for creepy, and you reached it with this one-shot. I hope to see more from you. Maybe the next time procrastination strikes?
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I also was thinking of the Gastly line when writing this, so that's pretty cool. I'm also glad you thought the "baby" name was effective. I felt like a creepy person when typing it, really, but if it helped... that's good. haha.
And I'm a huge procrastinator, so I'm sure you'll be seeing more from me indeed.
Thanks for reading/commenting~!
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