Thread: [Pokémon] Time, Space... and Minccino
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Old July 1st, 2012, 08:27 AM
docowocool
Beginning Trainer
 
Join Date: Jun 2012
Location: somewhere
Gender: Male
Nature: Lonely
Wow. Those 3 were amazing. I sure will follow this story. One mistake I noticed. "Lets the match begin!" Lady Minccino says..." I'm sure that she was a Cinccino not a Minccino. As in "Let the match begin!" Lady Cinccino says...

Other than that, nothing much at fault here. Once again, well done. It's nice to see someone making use of 1st person, especially from the Pokemon's point of view. Ice to see switching narrators too! It reminds me of a story I read here called"Survival Project" completely different storyline, but using the same way of writing (different Pokemon point of view each chapter).

You're welcome to put another chapter on.

Well done, docowocool
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