Thread: [Pokémon] N's Journey
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Old July 11th, 2012, 03:02 AM
docowocool
Beginning Trainer
 
Join Date: Jun 2012
Location: somewhere
Gender: Male
Nature: Lonely
Good chapter again.
Bit short and you barely understand really with all the scene changes. One error I noticed.
Quote:
“Go Accelgor!”

“Go Hydreigon!”

They were both at their last Pokémon, which, ironically was their first Pokémon. A bead of sweat rolled down Adler’s neck.

“I haven’t been in a battle this intense in years!”
I'm sure he was called Alder!

Tight corner? Intense battle? It took seconds!

Well done again! I still insist that the Entralink is in the middle!

docowocool
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