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July 11th, 2012, 03:02 AM
Join Date: Jun 2012
Good chapter again.
Bit short and you barely understand really with all the scene changes. One error I noticed.
They were both at their last Pokémon, which, ironically was their first Pokémon. A bead of sweat rolled down
“I haven’t been in a battle this intense in years!”
I'm sure he was called Alder!
Tight corner? Intense battle? It took seconds!
Well done again! I still insist that the Entralink is in the middle!
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