This to me looks like an outline for a story or a rough draft. I write stuff like this when I have an idea for a story or scene. It's confusing at first glance to other readers, but to me it makes sense. The mod already went through in depth, but I have to agree, take your time. You can't rush stories, even if you are excited about them.
Ask yourself the appropriate questions, this is how your story is made. Explore your own story. There's a lot of things you can get into.
This holds lots of potential, but you really disappointed me with the execution of the actual story. Hopefully you can make a comeback, I'll be watching. LOL