You've got a nice story there. This game has some potential, so don't stop working on it.
I just have a few remarks:
- First, you don't need any in-battle or title screenshots. Post more overworld screenshots, people are mostly interested in those;
- Pokemon can talk?
- I noticed that the inside maps are in R/S/E/FR/LG style, and the outside is BW style (Or D/P/P, I haven't played any of them so I wouldn't know). I just think that it would look better if you didn't mix styles, but it's up to you.
Also, one more question: How did you manage to create already 3 gyms with only 20 maps? I mean, I have 200 maps and only 4 gyms xD