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Old August 15th, 2012, 08:38 AM
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Altix
Son of a Snivy and a Zoroark
 
Join Date: Aug 2012
Location: Cda' Idaho
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Nature: Docile
So far I like the story. I think there should be some more background on Sammy though. It was rather short as well. Numbers under 20 should be written out for example instead of "sammy is 13" put "sammy is thirteen" good luck with the story!
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