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Old September 7th, 2012 (01:14 PM).
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TornZero
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@juniebug, a few things. Though I like the Hell Form's dependence on an artefact, they're supposed to be empowered by their inner sins directly, having no reliance on a physical object for their abilities. Also, on the appearances, I'd really appreciate if you described them in words, rather than pictures. (Two of those pictures I've actually seen fairly frequently, and the Hell form is supposed to be rather demonic; much less human.) Your powers need to be elaborated on as well. If you need help with wording, I'm sure someone'll be willing to work with you. Finally, I'd like it (for organizational and space purposes) if you put your character sheet in [spoiler][/spoiler] tags.

I'm not asking you to erase anything you've already made, just expand on the things I've noted. Ultimately, though, your acceptance will be in The warden's hands.
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